Sunday, May 3, 2020
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Hi Ryder,
ReplyDeleteYou have worked so hard on your story, well done. You planning was very well thought about. You have put a lot of thought into each sense and included this in your story.
I like the way that you told me the gun had a spear on the end of it, instead of just saying a gun. It make me feel like I am at the parade too.
Have you been to a dawn service before? Did it make you feel sad?
Hi Ryder
ReplyDeleteGreat writing work. Your work is tidy and clearly laid out which makes it easy to read. I agree with Michelle I can see that your planning has really helped you to write about the Dawn Parade. Have you tried ANZAC cookies? Do you like them?